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What are the things that I find beautiful?
A smile that just happens.
A heart that keeps beating even when it's breaking.
Calloused hands and feet with thick, bulging varicose veins
because they belong to people who didn't take the easy way out,
people who worked, who strove for what they got.

What else do I find beautiful?
Eyes, expressive eyes.
Eyes that are so intense that you can see the realness of the person within.
Eyes that are bright with unshed tears yet
keep on forging forward, looking straight ahead,
never down at their feet in defeat.
Eyes that look at the stars and see more than
swirling orbs of gas and dust held together by mere gravity.

I also find flowers beautiful.
Because they can't help what they are,
they can't help how they look.
They're one of the most natural,
most unartificial things in the universe
and that gives them this simplistic, very unfrivolous type of beauty.

There are many kinds of beauty though
and humans don't fall under the same category as flowers.
We're too complex for that.
We carry too much baggage, too much drama,
too many conflicting ideologies and beliefs.
Our desires and choices and the essence
of who we choose to be never end with 'just because'.
There are always reasons behind reasons
and desires behind desires.
And that's perfectly fine.
To a human being,
it's natural to have some form of damage,
some degree of brokeness or insecurity
because that means that you've experienced something.
That emotions aren't just words to you,
that Life isn't merely a state of existing.

If you've felt pain then that means
that you cared enough about something
to let it get into the deepest parts of you.
And that is half of what makes you beautiful.
I say half because beauty isn't all internal strength and internal honesty.
It's much more than that.

Beauty is only beautiful if it manifests itself.
If you gather up all the pieces of beauty that is inside of you
and fling it out to the world with the objective
of creating something that will resonate with other people as well.
I know it sounds like I'm talking about art and stories but I'm not.
It's connected to the same idea but it's much more that.
It's in how you live your life and in how you touch the lives of everyone around you.
It doesn't have to be something so totally grandiose
or life-changing or 'one for the history books'.

If it made someone smile,
if it made someone laugh,
if it made someone sing or dance,
if it made someone want to extend their hand out to someone that needs their help
or if it made someone think a little harder
about who they are or where they stand in their lives,
then you've manifested your beauty.
Then you've done something beautiful.
Hello, my girlfriend asked me to come up with one word to describe 'Beauty'... this is what my brain spewed out. Please tell me what you think! I'd love any form of feedback.

A few questions, if you'd be so inclined;
1. How did the piece make you feel? Was there a strong emotional impact?
2. In terms of grammar/vocabulary/spelling is there anything you would like to point out?
3. Any comments/suggestions for improvement?
4. What do YOU find beautiful? :)
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wolfcraz-11 Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This was lovely. This may be lengthy. Feel free to skim. In response to your questions:

1. How did the piece make you feel? Was there a strong emotional impact?
     I felt that I could consider myself as beautiful. I do not have major physical flaws according to culture's opinion of beauty. I am not full white. I look very multi-racial and I suppose I always felt that, that made me different and therefore not up to standards. Putting it into words it sounds strange and ridiculous but this is an insecurity I held. This poem helps me realize my supposed flaws and scars are only testimony that I live life vicariously without letting fear hold back my dreams. I too recognize beauty in small things and tend to surround myself with these things, especially flowers.
2. In terms of grammar/vocabulary/spelling is there anything you would like to point out?
     Just the line: "If you gather up all the pieces of beauty that is inside of you" The subject and verb need to agree. pieces that are inside of you
3. Any comments/suggestions for improvement?
     Not many, I agree with the prior comment to create some breaks for the reader to stop and ponder a bit. Ask questions maybe?
4. What do YOU find beautiful?
     I find beauty in goodness as well. People can in fact be quite beautiful. I know a few people that truly have a beautiful heart of love and giving. It is with these people I comfort my painful memories. Animals' love for people is a beautiful thing. Even my frogs offer beauty in response to my love and care. That is the relationship of life. In return to love the partner gives beauty. This is what I believe as part of my religion. I feel any powerful belief that leads people to goodness is also a very beautiful thing. Small things, big things, many things can impart beauty in my eyes.

I look forward to reading your work and perhaps hearing feedback on mine.
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streetcamera17 Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you for your great critique. I agree, we need to view our scars as testaments of our strength, our daring. Thank you for spotting that grammatical error by the way. Sure, I would love to check out your work as well.
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wolfcraz-11 Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much. I hope I can get some feedback as well. ^_^
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kirbyfight1 Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2014
Due to time issues I can only answer numbers 1 and 4...(sorry)

How did I feel after reading this poem?
It reminded me to never underlook my achievements.
I am a generally joyful person, and a lot of my fellow peers think like so, but sometimes I want to be more than that. I want to be the person that shines above all the rest. This arrogance is something that I have longed to erase from me. This poem showed me that simple things can be beautiful, as long as you stay true to yourself. That is a lesson I think many people can learn to follow, including myself.

What do I find beautiful?
Backed up by pure motives,
A single smile can go a long way.
To change a person's outlook on this world,
and to plant a stem to grow into the bountiful harvest to a brighter future.
In short, I find anything that is driven by goodness to be beautiful,
No matter how small.

Good job on this poem. As always, it's always amazing to read your works! 
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Naktarra Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2014   Writer
Hey, I'm from :icongrammarnazicritiques: and I'm here to review for you. 

First off I think you've caught me in a time of the most relaxed state I can be in, which made you poem all the more powerful to me. You're doing something really right here and I encourage you to drive forward to whatever writing passion you fill to desire. 

1. How did the piece make you feel? Was there a strong emotional impact?

You have a very strong choice of impact. You're not pulling a type of writing which is too predictable and you're easily jumping from each form of beauty in the way you discuss the piece. The way you deliver your emotion is almost like a gentle tone to the reader.

2. In terms of grammar/vocabulary/spelling is there anything you would like to point out?


The only thing I would like to point out is something I kinda typically put out there since I'm nit-picky about it. I find sometimes in poetry that bars run a little too long and it makes it look clustered. My example for this would be the fourth staff in your poem where it starts running to a point where you might consider some sort of break in between. 

3. Any comments/suggestions for improvement?


My suggestion? Keep at it. You have a very observant sense of writing. :) (Smile) 

4. What do YOU find beautiful?

What I find beautiful? Ah, what I find beautiful is people in passion in what they are doing. There's a different sense of quality in it than people don't it for the fame. 
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